Before I reveal this Project’s most listened to musical piece, some short notes about a couple of things that didn’t appear at the top of the stats which informed this all-time (so far) Top-Ten.
No LYL Band songs. This Project grew out of music that I’ve been making with keyboard player and vocalist Dave Moore for more than 45 years as the LYL Band. From the start of playing together we sometimes included poetry or other peoples’ words they had not designed to sung or performed. This continued after the Parlando Project launched, and they make up a portion of pieces shared here throughout the years. Many of these Top Ten pieces are worked-out and worked-on arrangements, often done “one-man-band” style where I play and track each part, discarding inferior takes and thinking through what works best. But, when Dave and I play together, we track “live” in the purest/rawest sense: most often one-take and without really introducing the song to each other. I usually provide Dave with a chord sheet for the pieces I bring to a session – Dave sometimes does for me when he’s singing one. It’s extraordinarily spontaneous. Given that neither of us are virtuosos or trained improvisors, that this ever works well enough to present something worth retrospective listening surprises and pleases me. As time passes, as cultural expectations of craft and technology engender rising baselines of sound quality and tightness in recording, I still treasure that kind of music. Against Artificial Intelligence it brings Art-farcical Intransigence.
No recent songs. Nothing from the last six years made it to the Top Ten. I should have expected this. While blog readership has steeply increased over the ten years, listenership has had a much flatter curve, so the longer a piece has been available, the more likely it is to have gathered higher listens. Most new pieces gather a blip over the first couple of weeks from those who follow here, but then there is the “long tail” where listens accrue over time. When I look at daily stats reports the list of pieces getting a listen on the past day is typically 40-60 listings long.
The Top Ten is full of stuff from 2018-2020, and seeing this I wondered if this was a sweet spot in the Project’s development. It was a time where I could spend four-days-a-week working on composition and recording, largely unhindered – and I can hear some of the concentrated care and regular, scheduled, luxurious, time in the Top Ten I’ve been presenting to you this week. I also envy the level of energy and endurance I could marshal as a younger person. But still I tell myself: I’ve learned things over the years of doing this – even garnered some improved recording technology and techniques – and I think (comparing best to best) that I can at least equal the level of those earlier pieces.
So what was the piece with the most listens out of the more than 900 I’ve published here since 2016? Emily Dickinson’s “Ample make this Bed,” that broadly referencing and deeply felt ode to love, to rest, to death from 2018 – a piece I did shortly after visiting the Dickinson Homestead museum in Amherst that summer.
Listening to it now eight summers later I marvel at the number of tracks making up this recording: drum-set, bass, electric piano, some synth line in there, my chant-not-quite-singing vocal, and that patient, excellent, and fair electric guitar solo. Could I equal it now? I can’t say for sure – it’s hard to judge “equal” between differing kinds of musical expression too – but I’d be happy if any piece I complete next week would work as well as this one does.
Here’s the audio player to hear that performance. Your player “called home?” This alternative, a highlighted link that will open a new tab with the audio player your way of reading this blog suppresses.
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“Or if you want something visual, that’s not too abysmal” as one of the recent additions to the choir invisible sang, here’s the lyric video of this recording of “Ample make this Bed” I did a few years later.
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And before I leave this post, thanks to everyone who’s ever listened to one of these Parlando Project musical pieces, and more than double thanks to those who have listened to more than one.
Returning now to our countdown of the ten most listened to Parlando Project musical pieces, already in progress. Today we pick up at the fourth most-listened-to song.
Number 4 is Jean Toomer’s “Her Lips are Copper Wire.” I’m in the middle of doing a series on founding Surrealist Paul Éluard, known for his Modernist love poems. Now, I believe Best! And GOAT rankings should remain silly exercises – but as much as I like Éluard and want more English-speakers to be aware of him, it’s entirely possible that the greatest Surrealist love poem is this one, written by this American, Toomer. Musically, I use acoustic guitar and spare piano, a combination I see in several other of this Parlando Top Ten – and there’s what I think is a more successful electric guitar solo at the end here.
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Moving to the podium steps, we have the third-most-popular song in the decade of this Parlando Project, Robert Frost’s “The Aim Was Song.” This one is an outright electric guitar song. That statement should go double, as I played the synth part that weaves with the guitar using a second guitar with an added MIDI pickup which lets my fretboard fingers work with electrically-generated instrument sounds and control virtual instruments.
I went to a store to look for a guitar to host the MIDI pickup, seeking the cheapest thing with a neck I liked on their wall of low-end used instruments. This battered Samick fit the bill. The red strap is a string damper, as I don’t want any open string overtones to confuse the MDI signal.
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Runner up in this list of most popular Parlando musical pieces? “Backyard” by Carl Sandburg. What a great piece for a late August evening in America. Sandburg, this child of immigrants, listens from his porch as darkness starts to come earlier now in his Chicago, and hears the sounds of other immigrants under a benevolent moon-universe above all borders and clocks. I know I played the synth and string parts here with my little plastic keyboard because those parts use volume and modulation wheels on the keyboard to modify and shape the notes. Vocally I add what I call “inline epigraphs,” little quotes from other songs that I hear echoing with Sandburg’s poem.
This Little Plastic Keyboard replaced an even smaller one that I wore out over the decade of this Project. I have a cousin who teaches piano and she’s agast that I put a scribble-strip with the white notes names above the keys. The two wheels to the left of the keys are volume and modulation controller wheels. The Novation MIDI controller is one of the least expensive currently sold with both of these implemented as real wheels.
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What was the piece with the most listens among the more than 900 audio pieces I’ve published here over the past ten years? Check back soon as I reveal that one in my next post.
I can’t let the anniversary month of August go by without doing a summary of what have been the most popular of the more than 900 musical pieces and more than 1,000 posts since the Parlando Project publicly launched in 2016,
I’m going to do this Top Ten in a 6-3-1 format to keep these posts from running too long. Another difference: I tend to talk most about the words we use here and their authors, but the next few posts are going to be more about the music we compose and play as part of this Project. So, let’s not waste any time, on to the countdown.
At position 10 we find pioneering Imagist H.D.’s “The Pool.” This is a personal favorite of mine, not only for the enigmatic poem that provides the words, but for the early use of an arpeggiator to let me incorporate the – what is it? – mandolin or zither or oud virtual instrument here along with low bowed string riff that I played with a little plastic keyboard or my MIDI guitar. Maybe I should note here that “virtual instruments” (VI) does not mean AI by any definition of the term. They are databases of recorded notes, often with a range of articulations that can be called up instantly and played, just as “real” instruments are played or scored and played.
At position 9 we have another set of early Modernist initials: E. E. Cummings’ “Crepuscule (I Will Wade Out). I had forgotten that Bjork had already set a version of this poem when I did this setting in 2018. The instrumentation chosen is a favorite of mine: acoustic guitar and spare, sustained piano. The way the strings on a small wood box mix with the strings in large hardwood coffin struck with hammers as their overlapping waveforms combine never fails to please me. Here, as I often do, I’m playing single notes on the piano so as not to challenge my nearly non-existent piano skills. The piano is doing what a simple electric bass or solitary low bowed-string part might do in the arrangement.
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At number 8 we get Arthur Rimbaud’s “Eternity.” I try to mention the influences on this Project from time to time. They are many, and they are strong. They need to be strong because I’m not a “natural” as musician or performer. While I think I have some talent, however simplistic, as creator of musical ideas from the composer’s side, no one is going to pick me as the best choice for a vocalist – and even on “my instrument,” the guitar, I have inconsistent and varying skills. Patti Smith then is one of the influences, partly because she took her poetic vision and then went on will and audacity to become the frontperson in a band. Her championing of Rimbaud led me to consider that poet, and in my setting of “Eternity” I’m sort of emulating the sound of the Patti Smith Group, phrasing the vocal somewhat like she would.
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7 is held down by William Butler Yeats’ “The Stare’s Nest at My Window,” one of his poems about the Irish Civil War. A few weeks after I presented this poem musically, a man, George Floyd, was killed by callousness and negligence on the part of my city’s police force a few blocks south of where I live, and remembering this Parlando piece, I felt Yeats was speaking to my time and place. Listening to my musical setting now more than five years later, it still evokes that time for me. I can’t remember exactly how I treated the ominous string parts in it to get that sound, – some kind of delay or reverb I think – and the same spare sustained piano playing that I’ve use elsewhere in other pieces chills to the bone here.
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Place 6, “Pied Beauty” by Gerard Manley Hopkins. Once more listeners seemed to like, or at least try, my writing for bowed orchestral strings. Here the spare strangeness of the parts and the odd note choice, leaping interval, electric guitar solo over the top intends to evoke majesty of rustic nature – but I’m somewhat surprised at this one reaching this level of popularity, as I’m not sure the piece succeeds.
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Not that anything in today’s group of songs explicitly references Jazz…
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Last one for today, number 5, returns to a piece that is a favorite of mine and one that I think represents elements of what I do well: Emily Dickinson’s “We Grow Accustomed to the Dark.” Another piece largely composed with orchestral instrument parts. I fear serious orchestral composers and aficionados think these compositions of mine simpleminded – and furthermore, practical necessity dictates that they are implemented by virtual instruments making up the orchestra, and so no matter how well recorded and implemented these approximations in software are, they lack the full detail of their real counterparts. In my defense, I’ve taken to calling my approach here “Punk Orchestral” – trying with that name to make the point that I’m using the tools, ideas, and opportunities that I have to make what music I can make now, without deferring to the prerequisites of virtuosity and more theoretical knowledge. Let me make this clear as I wrap up today: I recognize my limits, respect those skills and the dedication to practicing and perfecting them that I lack, but I persist in doing what I can with what I can marshal none-the-less.
If you’re a long-time reader or listener here, you probably already know that one of the principles of this Project is “Other People’s Stories.” That usually means that the words used here are literary poetry that has reached public domain status. Every so often I do use my own words – but even then, it can still be “Other People’s Stories.”
I mean, it should be clear right at the start that I’m not a daughter whose mother has fallen deep in Alzheimer’s disease. Again, long-timers here may recognize today’s piece is part of a series of sonnets on this topic which have appeared here over the past few years. Yes, these poems are based on real events, some of which I observe, others which I hear some details of second-hand – but either way they are poems, not journalism. The poem may suggest its own details, and I’ll listen.
While I’m talking about guiding principles here, there’s another one: “Music in Differing Styles.” I’ve always had trouble with the common, innocent, “conversation starter” question: “What kind of music do you like?” The idea that I (or even we) should have a ready-to-hand specific genre label for the music we like seems bizarre to me. “Oh, dark post-rock neo-shoegaze emo. How about you?” might keep the conversation rolling, but for an old man like myself who listened to and appreciated a lot of different music over many decades it might better be limited to what kind of music are you enjoying this week or this afternoon. You see, I think that one of music’s strongest elements is the variety of how it expresses itself. Even music I’m not presently in the mood for can be valuable – it might guide me toward musical opposites, and by that highlight the value of that contrasting form of expression.*
The problem here is that I do believe a great many folks have strong musical dislikes in genres or performance articulations. With but a hint that I might fail to meet a listener’s performance expectations, or that I’ve chosen some disliked ways of organizing sounds, some will drop my music from further consideration. I shouldn’t object to this: there’s a glut of music out there, no reason to expend time on unrewarding music. And because I’m audacious, some of my music here may be more than just a hint.
As I compose and play music for the Parlando Project I do hope that some listeners will appreciate some of what I do. I also expect that every potential listener here – yes, every single one – won’t care for a least some of what I present. If I’m composing for acoustic guitar one day, adding cello to that the next: some will like it, some not so much. If I work with synths and arpeggiators, some will like it, others suspect it not organically raised and locally sourced. If I play loud electric lead guitar, some will like it, others will pull the plug. If I avoid my “of subjective quality” singing voice, some will be glad, and then others would prefer that there would be a singer, however rough-hewn. I could wish that this variety of plausible likes was additive, but I think it’s most often subtractive. One “bad” piece where I don’t execute well, or choose the wrong kind of execution, and I may well be excluded from further musical consideration.
Sometimes I think I could “pick a lane” for Parlando Project music, or split my musical expression into a variety of separate projects each with a constrained/predictable musical style – but I haven’t yet done so. In the meantime, I sincerely appreciate those that have stuck with this effort.
The T-shirt I’m wearing today. The complexity of the Jazzmaster electric guitar’s design doesn’t really like playing into a loud, high-gain amp without being subject to idiomatic artifacts. You can hear some of it’s spring-loaded vibrato bridge and extra string length above the nut and below the bridge resonating and pinging in today’s music.
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So, here’s today’s piece. No acoustic guitars. No singing, just spoken word in half the song. Yes, synths. Yes, loud lead guitar. A couple of notes on the music today: there’s a persistent glitchy riff in this one that’s a happy accident. After successfully playing the digital synth melody that weaves in an out of the piece, I went to play a Mellotron virtual instrument using the same MIDI guitar as a controller, and something went wrong. Instead of the evocative lo-fi sound of a Mellotron’s tape samples, all I got was this stuttering sputter. Staying in creative mode, I just kept playing, producing that line of organized noise you can hear today.**
But it’s not all synths and mistakes one finds in the faults of electronic machinery, there’s a long wordless response to the daughter living with her mother’s chronic dementia expressed with electric guitar at the end of the piece. You can hear it with the audio player below. Have the glitches of brain matter or computer interfacing obscured this player for you? It’s most likely a matter of some ways of reading this blog not showing the graphical audio player. For those in that situation this highlighted link will open a new browser tab with its own audio player then.
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*I think the same thing is true of the variety of expression in poetry, particularly in the shorter, lyric poem. While I admire the extraordinarily literate who’ve read a thousand novels or have mounted hundreds of full-scale dramatic plays, that much of those things is a heavier lift. A 14-line poem or a 3-minute song is not some sole-authoritarian demand for one’s time.
**I remain too frightened to consider using guitar-controlled MIDI in any kind of live performance. Despite MIDI guitar controllers being decades old technology, only a handful of braver and more skilled musicians have done so.
I’ve written briefly, here and there, about the time leading up to my late wife’s death, so let me write today about the days immediately afterward. Because this is a blog, and readers’ attentions are limited by that format’s expectations, it’s going to be brief again.
Most people have had experience with death before coming to the death of a spouse, but the qualities of that experience have their own specifics, felt by us one to another. My first feelings were of a very tangible physical absence. A skin-covered shape that was not there. The missing fingerprint sound of her voice. Isn’t that odd, I felt so intensely what I could not hear, could not feel. I was setting out into a life in silhouette.
Renée’s mother handled the funeral arrangements entirely, which was a blessing. That went by in a blurred quickly, and I remember little of it. I decided to go back to my demanding job right away. I thought it would be good to stay connected to those parts of my world that still existed, that carried on without – but I had a great deal of vacation time banked, and for a while set aside a day each week to do post-death tasks. Renée must have left me info on things like accounts, she was organized about such things, and I made a long list of the transitional stuff that needed to be done. I had a folder with lots of copies of her death certificate, and one-by-one I checked off the tasks. I think the very month she died was the last payment on our home’s mortgage, which I sent off thinking that she had just missed that milepost.
One of a couple who were in Renée’s large circle of friends started calling me, asking how I was, and listening to me express the little things, those grief specifics that flickered around me.* They would invite me to get-togethers and events, keeping me engaged in society at large. I was numbed or preoccupied to think about this at the time, but I now suspect this was something Renée had asked them to do before she died, but whether they did this on their own or at a friend’s request, it was an extraordinary blessing. For a few months this couple (and my job) were my tugging connection to the ongoing world.
In a short interval after Renée’s death, I also began spending much time playing music, by myself or with two or three others. I spent time searching out low-priced but unusual guitars, a not all-together-admirable spate of “retail therapy.” I began to compose and record music I made with them. Here’s the odd part for those who’ve followed this now more than a decade old Parlando Project: it was predominantly music without words, the stuff that would be genre-categorized as “instrumental guitar music.” Here I was, this poet, who had married this young poet, who was missing her voice intimately, making music with no words in it.**
And then during the next year, I met and started going out with the woman who’d become my living wife. This was welcome and yet a little strange. Like many people with loved ones who’ve died, I would have intense dreams of the departed, and sometimes those sensations would slip over into waking hours where I’d have this palpable demi-sense that Renée was present. I can remember one such time when I was awaking in my empty bedroom and I had the strong sense – no apparition, but just as when your “object permanence” knows what’s behind you or beside your peripheral vision – and without hearing in a vibrating ear-drum way, I was hearing my dead wife’s voice. I was embarrassed, and I thought I should try to explain that I was seeing this other woman.
How did this conversation resolve? There were no actual words, no transcript that could be recorded on some spirit-device, no ghostly pronouncement. Just a sense that some sense of Renée (or my own sense of Renée) knew, and that we acknowledged this new thing together.
Returning now to this present August. Like a lot of folks this summer I saw the new movie of “The Odyssey.” One controversial thing in this elaborate (and IMHO, successful) take on the old tale was Matt Damon’s performance of a haunted Odysseus. This is not everyone’s view of the character, and auteur-school critics tell us it’s a repeating trope in the director’s work. But what was resonating with me as I viewed the movie was that same flattened-and-its-opposite facets in Damon’s portrayal. And what an odd thing to see: a cost millions, makes millions, IMAX spectacular movie version of a poem. Makes the Parlando Project seem so modest in comparison.
During the movie, a song, a favorite of mine from The Sixties™, kept going through my mind: Tim Buckley and Larry Beckett’s “Song to the Siren.”*** I decided I wanted to record it.
One problem with setting off on that odyssey? It’s a song that’s been done by many much-more talented singers than I am, and it’s the sort of song that calls for a vocalist capable of a bigger more dramatic sound than my voice can manifest. I thought I’d try. And I did. I made multiple attempts to sing Beckett’s words even if I knew I couldn’t portray Buckley’s vocal melody. Take my word for it, they were all bad. Even trying to “comp” a best of the bits vocal track was a failed effort.
But I was left with this arrangement of “Song to the Siren” that I still liked, subdued electric bass, sweetly keening fiddle, and the Guild 12-string acoustic guitar that I bought as Guild was closing it’s Rhode Island factory and the store where I bought it at a deep discount was going out of business. Today’s musical piece has become an instrumental, presented here in “The Place Where Music and Words Meet” – and the words are, this time, absent.
Since Larry Beckett’s words are so important to the resonance of “Song to the Siren” for me, this video displays them.
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*One thing I can remember telling them about: every workday morning I would buy the daily papers at a convenience store near work. With the long-practiced eye of a veteran 20th century newspaper reader, I’d read them quickly in the early morning hours at my desk before the rest of the staff in my technology section would arrive, and then fold them and set them aside. At night I’d bring them home, and Renée would read them in the evening. In the first days after I’d returned to work I realized that there was no one at home to take the papers back to. This is the strange alternating contrast of grief: flattening at times and then at other times you can feel the textures of the smoothest surface, the tiniest detail.
Here’s a contrasting thing. One of the reasons I read the papers each morning, other than general habit, was that the radio network I worked for had a 24-hour news operation, with a large newsroom a couple of floors above me. Reading those papers was a way to keep appraised of what my coworkers there would be dealing with.
One morning, just over a month after my wife died, a tech coworker came back to the desk next to mine and said the newsroom was in an uproar, that a plane had flown into a skyscraper in New York. I told him (engage history-nerd tone) that this’d happened before: that an errant bomber had hit the Empire State Building in the Forties. “If you Google it, you can probably see photos of the aftermath.” “No, this is different.” my desk-neighbor said. I went up the newsroom. Yes, this was different: it was September 11th. That morning thousands of people died, and many more had risks and new realities to deal with. We had employees on airline flights in the air at that moment, the newsroom had an extraordinary news day, and we had offices in a nearby tower across the street a half-a-continent away – and the name of that tall Minnesota building was also “The World Trade Center.” I was heads-down in the technology logistics, my professional area. But here’s my specific thing: I felt no grief. Like a vaccine, I was inoculated, all my grief receptors were still occupied.
**I had one epiphany that helped me begin making music with words again. That benevolent couple who helped me bridge over my transition took me to a concert by Le Tigre at First Avenue. Le Tigre was a follow-up project led by the Bikini Kill principal Kathleen Hanna. They were non-virtuosic musically, and the lyrics were sharply funny/social analytical – and served as a punky early-21st-century reminder of the promise of bands like The Fugs or my own LYL Band work with Dave Moore.
***This song is one of several The Sixties™ musical efforts that refer to “The Odyssey.” Another fine song, “Tales of Brave Ulysses” was inspired not just by Homer but by it’s lyricist listening to Leonard Cohen’s “Suzanne” with its doomed sailors. A more oblique one: The Zombies magnificent final LP “Odessey and Oracle.” No sailors, no sirens, in it – and the epic poem’s title is famously misspelled on the echt Sixties™ cover. I’m unfamiliar with how the title was chosen for this album recorded in another summer, the one in 1967 just before the group that made it broke up from lack of commercial viability, but it’s a suite of songs about loss and separation that ends in the celebratory song “Time of the Season.” Remarkably, that final song became a hit nearly two years later, when there was no band remaining to tour behind the hit. The suitors at the banquet recruited some chancers from Texas to pretend to be this British group. That bogus bunch of Zombies included 2/3 of what would become ZZ Top.
OK, I told you this is my summer plan: fewer readers, fewer listeners, and some of the posts are going to get weirder and deal with specialized topics that diverge from the usual stuff I write about here. Let’s start today with some personal history, something I worry about running on too long about, but I’ll try to keep it brief:
I have no formal musical training, and I even hesitate to call myself “self-taught,” as to me that infers that I have self-studied music and could demonstrate some organized mastery of it. One of my inspirations, Frank Zappa, for example, liked to recommend “Go to library, find some books, and learn how to compose.”* This is not the way complex, particularly orchestral, composition has traditionally been taught, but it made sense to me. I tried it. It didn’t stick. Though when younger, I made an effort for a couple of years to learn basics of theory and notation, but as soon as things got to examples I started to play with those examples which distracted my orderly hierarchical learning. This still happens: I’ll read some deconstruction of a musical piece, or I’ll come upon an explanation of a musical technique, and I’ll drop studying it and go off and try to use it for my own purposes.
In summary, I learned to compose music largely by playing with music. Complex or orchestral music has few examples of composers who learned in the absence of ordered instruction, but there are more examples of vernacular and popular music musicians who learned this way. Many/most of those musician/composers are effective musicians in the style they are composing in – and if large ensemble works are rarer, otherwise the complexity and sophistication of music by such composers is not necessarily limited. And now here’s the next limitation I have use ingenuity to deal with: I honestly don’t think I’m a competent musician. I’m an inconsistent guitarist with some ideas and techniques I can execute on good days. I started as a terrible singer and with improvement I hope my rough-hewn singing can rise to the level of eccentric stylist.
But – even as a child I had an appreciation for “classical music” – that highbrow stuff made with educations and exacting training. In 1960 or 61 I got an Airline transistor radio: one of those little chrome-plated trim plastic boxes a little larger and thicker than a cigarette pack that otherwise might occupy a mid-century pocket. This was in the interregnum between Rock’n’Roll’s emergent artists and the Beatles, and I listened largely to WOI-AM. Run out of a university, it could claim to be one of the first American “public radio” stations, and one that broadcast large blocks of classical music. Around this time, the wife of our little town’s public school superintendent tried to teach my classmates, farm kids, about orchestral music, and they wanted nothing to do with her seriousness about it. The besieged teacher appreciated my appreciation and likely strained herself tolerating my off-key signing in her school choir. I liked the pieces she played the class off records, often remembering them as snippets of the same pieces that were played as underscore in animated cartoons on TV. Any underground, prog rock, punk, indie, goth, etc kid from younger generations may appreciate: my peers not digging the Bach, Beethoven, and Brahms stuff was part of the attraction.
Then for two years I went to college, at a small school south of Des Moines, which, oddly enough had an ambitious opera program. Eventually the director behind this would have a nice, newly-build concert hall for his productions, but back then it was a tiny college theater or the flat-floor hall over the top of the college lunchroom. There I had the experience of hearing my classmates, kids my age, along with a few imported “ringers,” singing the classical repertoire, sometimes less than 10 yards away. This is human music, made by creatures like myself, even if I wasn’t – and wouldn’t be – able to duplicate their sound.
I promised you weird. Have I delivered? I at this point didn’t play any instrument, but I was enamored of and writing poetry. Somewhere around then I was introduced to art song.**
The same Willa Cather poem as our last Parlando episode has been set by two modern composers working in the classical tradition. This one is by William Bolcom, a composer whose breadth and aims I admire, even if I don’t think this works particularly well.
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If I was to describe the Parlando Project it would sound like a definition of art song: “Literary poetry (generally not intended for musical performance when written) set to music by a composer who normally is not the adapted lyricist. From what I can see, art song pieces tend to be “audition” or “resume” pieces for classical music singers. Many are written to be sung with just piano or other solo instrument accompaniment, or at best, a small backing ensemble, and so are low-budget and logistically undemanding. Complex orchestrations can be added, large-scale opera and oratorio are the grander relations of this tradition.
Long time listeners here will not need me to say that a typical Parlando Project piece doesn’t sound like art song, even if it sits inside the definition. More on that soon – but art song ought to be right up my alley, right? I’ve listened to a fair amount of art song in the decades since. If my energy and life avails, I’m still amendable to hearing more of art song in concert, particularly by modern composers. And…
…I don’t care much for a lot of it. Oh, I almost always admire the training and skill of the singers and their competent musicians. I observe and admire the composers’ shared goals with my own. It’s easy for me to see them as fellow strivers intending to bring the expanded palette of music to the sound and dance of poetry. The whole enterprise, singers, accompanists, composers have resources objectively beyond those I can marshal – which should be a good thing. In thinking about this paradox, I think that’s part of the problem. And no, I’m not talking about jealousy. I genuinely want them to succeed every time, and if it’s only sometimes that I think they do – well, batting averages and shots on goal percentages come with the effort. They certainly do with my art.
Here’s a setting by Libby Larsen. Notice how the singer increases the level of ornamentation after the opening verse. I’ve briefly met Larsen, a couple of times., and like Bolcom I admire the aims of her work.
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First off, the composers often write complex melodies. Hampered by my lousy singing talents, I feel my pieces should have more melody – but with the art song composers I often think their elaborateness obscures the impact of the words rather than reinforcing them. The “word-music” and phrasing of the poetry can be contorted to fit the melody’s interest, and only sometimes will that contortion produce interesting effects by abstracting the flow an actor would use rendering the words, with unexpected phrasing being applied from the notes. In these matters I sometimes think of the stillborn dream of one of the most musical of English-language poets, William Butler Yeats: to create a para-art-song tradition that would preserve more of his “word music.” I’m just a naïve composer, a nobody, but I’d suggest that harmonic or timbral elaboration might better stand in for over-reliance on melodic complexity in art song with significant poetry.
Another performance of Larsen’s setting of Cather’s poem. Would this singer be judged as lacking the technical polish of the ones above? Even if so, I preferred it. Sung at a slower tempo and I sense the singer wants to inflect more meaning into the words.
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The singers or conductors, working from score, are asked to faithfully reproduce the composer, but I believe they are allowed some freedom in ornament. Given that constrained outlet, there’s a temptation to over-exercise this. Even from my limited knowledge, I know that some of the vocal articulations are traditional techniques in classical singing to express emotional states. Like all conventions (even contemporary ones in vernacular music) they risk being misunderstood or even taken for cliches when the convention isn’t correctly “translated” by the listener.
And now for someone else doing something with the same “The Hawthorn Tree” poem, using an approach much like mine. The performer (and, I believe composer) David Ellis has done nothing I can locate since issuing a set of 4 poem settings similar to this one, and they don’t seem to be widely available.
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Does a thru-line become apparent as I wrap this up? I probably come to art song believing in the power of the words to work for an audience with less adornment, and this may be the prejudice of a poet who later composed music and preforms it with their personal limited skills.*** I suspect all these dangers and detriments are already known to trained composers and performers, just as I know intimately the limitations I work with in making my pieces here. I respect their hard work and knowledge.**** How some of their work is experienced by this listener may well be my limitations, though I suspect (however muffled inside my own makeup and experiences) I’m more amenable to traditional classical art song than large portions of its potential audience.
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*This is a paraphrase from an interview I read, and a report of what he himself did. Flavorful quotes I can grab from Zappa: “Drop out of school before your mind rots from exposure to our mediocre educational system. Forget about the Senior Prom and go to the library and educate yourself if you’ve got any guts” and “If you want to get laid, go to college. If you want an education, go to the library.” Generally lacking money for college, this iconoclasm was promising to me, but let me point out empirically that sustainable non-academic orchestral composing is even more unlikely than following the thin odds of a conventional academic route.
**I also worked in my adulthood for more than 20 years for a radio network with a 24-hour classical music service. Kind of like I was saying about SF literature and fandom a couple of posts back: I’m not an expert in that field, but I’ve hung around with folks that where.
***Some singers in the folk music field, performing with single or sparce accompaniment can do this, but with more melodicism than my voice can provide. One of the more enthralling concerts I’ve experienced was June Tabor and a keyboardist. I felt the meaning of every single word she sang that night.
****The Parlando Project is designed, and has met its goals so far, as a non-revenue thing, despite my putting serious effort into it. Most classical-tradition performers and composers receive very little revenue for all their efforts, study, and hard work invested in their art. If we hear each other’s results differently (as I suspect we do) I recognize that difference/similarity.
OK, I warned you. It’s summer, this is where I get weird, maybe even self-indulgent, since the poetry audience consistently drops off for some reason during this season. We’re going to travel time and space a bit before we get to poetry – but we’ll get there.
This morning I saw that writer and musician Lenny Kaye was a recent guest on Aquarian Drunkard’s Transmissions podcast. Kaye has a long career mixing writing about music as well as making it. When writer Patti Smith wanted to inject some rock’n’roll into her poetry back in the early 1970s, it was Rock Critic/Musician Kaye that she recruited. Their earliest performances as a duo were highly improvisational. He describes them as “fields:” where Smith would start off in some direction and he would then respond on guitar, and the interaction would go off wherever it seemed to want to go. The results are one of the inspirations for this Project.*
As a podcast guest, Kaye talked about the things that shaped his life, his approach to the arts. Within this conversation he brings out this historical point: the “Rock Press,” that strange spontaneous birth in the Sixties,™ was significantly an outgrowth of Science Fiction fanzines. Kaye himself started one before he was a Rock Critic, Paul Williams who founded the seminal Crawdaddy was a SF fanzine veteran. Same for Greg Shaw, who founded Mojo Navigator and then Bomp, all magazineswriting seriously about Rock! These efforts proceeded the founding of Rolling Stone by about a year.**
OK, a little digression. I promise I’ll keep it short. As a young person I read some SF, liked some of it, but couldn’t call myself a full-fledged fan. I never subscribed to the several monthly midcentury pulps that were publishing SciFi regularly back then. Never attended a Con of any form. Never wrote for an SF fanzine or even sent a letter to an editor. By my late teenage years, poetry and music was my thing. None-the-less, because I liked smart folks with interests, I had friends who were intelligent and committed SF enthusiasts.
I’m not sure of the Transmission interviewer’s SF interest level. The SF feeding into to the critical writers/rock-is-an-art-form case was made and then petered out in the discussion – but as the interviewer redirected, Kaye uttered the name of an SF author, “Cordwainer Smith.” He said nothing more than the name, then the conversation moved on.
Longtime readers here may sense what I thought at that moment: “What does Cordwainer Smith have to do with this Rock/Lenny Kaye connection?” Cordwainer Smith isn’t an obligatory big name, a bust carved into the SF pantheon, but he was a writer in the Midcentury SF scene whose name I recalled. I called up my friend and Parlando contributor Dave Moore (who is much more SF knowledgeable). “I don’t think he wrote all that much,” Dave said. “He wrote stuff about interplanetary diplomacy.”
Summary overviews I’ve now read backup Dave. A couple of novels, a few book-length collections of shorter pieces. Cordwainer Smith was not one of those prolific pot-always-boiling writers who made a living out of pennies-a-word publishing. The distinctive name I could remember was a pen name, and the author who used it closely guarded his identity. That man, Paul Linebarger had a Political Science doctorate from Johns Hopkins, had professorships at the college level, rose to the military rank of colonel in the reserves after serving in WWII, and had continued hard-to trace-ties with US government diplomacy and likely spycraft.
Looking at the list of his works I see this story “Drunkboat. ” Huh? Now we touch the Venn diagram edges of the poetry and music nerd writing this. Could this be connected to “Le Bateau ivre” (The Drunken Boat”) – the wild, visionary poem written by the teenage French poet Arthur Rimbaud? In 1976 I bought my first Rimbaud collection, which included that poem, partly because Patti Smith spoke highly of Rimbaud. Back to our other Smith, Cordwainer, and his SF story: a quick Internet search said there is a connection with the poem. Of course, many a story, SF or otherwise, might just steal a title or a quote from high lit to class-up the joint.
October 1963. John Kennedy was President, he was welcoming the original Mercury 7 astronauts at the White House to celebrate the wrap up of the first US Earth orbit flights. Bobby Vinton’s “Blue Velvet” was the top record on the pop charts. “Drunkboat” is published and I wonder how many readers of Amazing Stories knew who Arthur Rimbaud was. In the future this will all make sense.
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This afternoon I found a copy of “Drunkboat.” As has happened to me before when I read Midcentury pulp magazine SF, I’m a little surprised by how clunkily it’s written. “Drunkboat” is told in a roughly implemented sort-of-fairytale mode. The dialog, while plentiful, is as awkwardly bad as a midcentury SF B-movie script, and there’s barely any attempt at characterization. The hard-science aspect sometimes seems applied as mere decoration for the genre audience, but it involves a farrago of space-time continuum hand-waving within a medical setting that might be a choice taken by an author with lengthy connections to Johns Hopkins.***
So why am I expending our shared time if this is simply a crappy 1963 pulp story? Be patient, the connection isn’t just casual, it’s integral.
Although the story references a multi-lightyear multi-planetary universe set thousands of years into the future – world-building Cordwainer Smith utilized for many of his SF pieces – one could easily see this story being intended as a prose rhapsody on the themes of Rimbaud’s poem. Given the elevated education and “day job” positions Smith/Linebarger held, I can suspect that he’s making a conscious choice to tell his story the way he does. Is he speaking down to some limited supposition of his pulp magazine audience, academically code-switching so to speak? Or does he like the artifice of telling a fantastic story in a way that subverts any chance of it portraying mundane reality? Was the writer reaching for an Orwell parable? Smith/Linebarger was fluent in German, and in places story elements remind me a little of Bertolt Brecht. The story drops in a number of Dada-level children’s rhymes as asides, and he’s constantly having fun with degraded homonyms. Our story’s hero is “Artyr Rambo.” The Earth location is “Meeya Meefla,” (say that last one aloud). And here’s another thing you might not expect (I can’t even fully explain its effect on me after reading it): the story, despite its flagrantly bad prose and poorly drawn plot, can still work. There’s a section when a doctor trying to understand our comatose hero orders both of them to be covered with a wire mesh “pain net” that dispenses agony to those beneath it, believing the shared pain will allow them to communicate. It’s not told in vivid prose, but the image is unforgettable.
Finally, at story’s end, our hero, at last given back his ability to speak, has a longish speech in which he extensively paraphrases or quotes Rimbaud’s wild and fantastic poem as if it’s his own spontaneous account. I looked at a couple of English translation of “Le Batteau ivre” and they aren’t exact matches to the speech in the story, but Smith/Linebarger was multilingual, it’s even possible he did his own translation. The story still accretes at that moment – as a furious and mysterious energy arises, it justifies itself, for it gives a context to Rimbaud’s wild poetry. And there it is: the moment of plausible connection that I hope you stuck around for: Lenny Kaye, the guy that Patti (not Cordwainer) Smith chose for her to weave her “Sea’s the possibility…go Rimbaud!” verse performances with, just said the name “Cordwainer Smith” – and I wondered.
Want some poetry and some music today too? Here’s a performance of a translation I did of Rimbaud’s poem “Eternity” a few years back. The music in this one, in tribute to Lenny Kaye and company, intentionally references the Patti Smith Group kind of vibe. Audio player gadget to hear it below. Has any such player disappeared into Space3? No net of pain required, I supply this highlighted link that will open a new browser tab with its own player.
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*Patti Smith was also writing some for the Rock press at the time, and I think both were working day jobs in retail in NYC: Smith at the Strand bookstore, Kaye at the Village Oldies record store. On a visit to NYC in the late Seventies I once saw Kaye behind the counter at Village Oldies. I was too starstruck to embarrass myself by saying anything. Besides the Patti Smith connection, the Kaye-curated 1972 compilation LP Nuggets was a formative influence on the Farfisa and fuzz-tone guitar sound of the initial electric version of the LYL Band.
**Williams’ intelligent Rock criticism helped set the format for those that followed. His SF connections never went away, and he became the executor of Phillip K. Dick’s literary estate. Later Shaw also worked in artist management and A&R roles. In the Seventies he was an important force in bringing forward Punk and New Wave aligned acts.
It’s also true that Jazz and folk-music magazines proceeded these Rock publications, and contributed some folks to Rock journalism, but the rise between late 1965 and 1967 of serious consideration of this new “Rock” music that was taking from and supplanting those genres was a new idea.
***”Drunkboat’s” hospital setting doesn’t seem all that richly observed to me, one who spent many midcentury years working in hospitals – but the discussion and dissention on medical treatments between doctors in this story may be some “inside baseball” that Smith had picked up.
Here’s a new Claude McKay poem song setting, “To a Poet,” completed as part of my concentration on his poetry this February. Somewhat of a “deep cut” in McKay’s poetry, but as sometimes happens when reading a bunch of poems, there was one set of lines that stood out as I read this pioneering Jamaican-American poet’s work. I’ll get to those lines, but first a detour about the music.
Which is something I don’t write much here. The Parlando Project started as a musical idea, though I always thought I’d want to say something about the experience of encountering the poems on the way to making the music, and so this blog. While true engagement with the blog posts here is hard to judge – something made harder by occasional bouts of what appear to be bots skimming (and reskimming) posts here since last autumn – there’s been a satisfying and unrelenting increase in visits to this blog over 10 years. Blogs may no longer be the new-hot, but the visits keep coming. Thank you, readers, and I wish that my personality and situation would allow me to be more attentive to your comments.* I treasure anyone that spends a little time here.
But the musical pieces, the cause of this all? They get no more listens than they did only a few years into this Project when monthly readership and listening numbers were roughly equal – while presently listeners are maybe 10% of the numbers of readers. I’m realistic about the limitations of my musical expression. I’m about as far from a poptomist composer as could be imagined, and I’ve long feared that not sticking to one style of music creates what used to be called by radio programmers “button pushers” – those who hear one or two songs they strongly dislike and decide to go elsewhere. I understand, people react to music sensually, emotionally, and so a bad experience with music creates a stronger distaste than a duff blog post or the choice of a poem some don’t care for – but my music making reflects my listening, it’s eclectic. I’m committed to musical adventurousness and variety, and so by intent or missteps the music may not always be something you’d choose. I don’t believe I’d enjoy this Project if it was anything else.
But one musical constraint has always been with me: my singing voice and its take it or leave it limitations. Spoken word poetry, even with integrated music, is one thing, and I’ll do that, but some words tell me they expect to be sung, and almost always, that means the singer is me. I’m grateful for the times my long-time LYL bandmate Dave Moore has given me and my listeners a break, and there have been scattered other “guest vocalists” over the decade. Today’s song is different. I wanted to do something (however simplified, as I think simplified music retains powers) more like Art Song, the composed music that features trained singers who express strong melodic contours through skilled techniques, rather than off-the-cuff, I’ll-give-it-a-go, folk-singing.
Go ahead, scroll down and listen to today’s piece setting to music the words of Claude McKay. I’ll wait. And here’s the text of McKay’s poem that was performed with my music.
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OK, you’re back. Who’s the guest vocalist? The stage name is Felicia. Felicia is a virtual instrument. Readers here may recall what that is, but I think it’s important to reiterate: a VI is often a set of atomized recorded samples of a real “acoustic” instrument, a whole range of notes with articulations expressing a range of colors. Let’s not confuse two-letter-acronyms, VI is not AI as expressed by services like Suno which take an overall text description of the nature of a song and create in one fell swoop the finished melodic lines of the singer (and all their arrangement and accompaniment) by apparently recombining conventional musical materials. If I take a VI of, for example an organ, and invoke it on my computer it won’t play a toccata, early Phillip Glass, or “Rock Lobster,” or anything like those pieces, no matter how I write a run-on requesting sentence about it. It instead needs me to play my MIDI guitar or little plastic keyboard, or inscribe notes on a MIDI piano roll notation. I could (as a very limited keyboardist) invoke arpeggiators or chord and pattern generators to extend what I play or write – but it still feels like composition to me. In contrast, AI like Suno feels like I’m a royal patron asking my musicians for some conventional musical noise to underscore my cultural pretenses, caring only that it be inoffensive.
Another difference: even a despot likely paid their court musicians something. AI? Not so much. The company that sells the Felicia voice VI (Dreamtronics) claims it pays the human singers that it samples to make its products.
Still, I expect this revelation, or its implementation in this piece, will repel some listeners. The spirals inside the ear have their own Uncanny Valley, and I too feel that fearful symmetry. It sounds like a human putting artifice onto itself or an artifice taunting the qualities of human. I put up with it because I had a goal, and my voice could never sing with the VI’s technique, particularly over a longer piece. I played the vocal line on my little plastic keyboard, and typed each syllable as text that the notes would sing. Early vocal VIs were very picky about needing explicit phonetic text, but this one knows much more about the baroque tangles of English pronunciation, yet I still had to tweak some syllables. The program has a range of controls for expression variations – learning how to use them will improve results – but it presents default expressive choices that keep the monotonous spiel of old-school robot speech away.**
Felicia made it much easier to get something that wasn’t fakey bad or unintelligible as older vocal VIs I’ve tried, even as I still felt the need to do work to improve problematic passages. It took me several hours to create the vocal line realization you hear in today’s piece. A trained human singer at the mic could have done it in an hour, even including leeway for retakes and “try it this ways.”
One thing I noticed: even when I had polished up the intelligibility of the VI sung text, the meaning of the words seemed abstracted to me as a listener. Oddly, this is the same thing I sometimes hear as a listener with Art Song, where the composer’s elaborate melodies or the singer’s concentration on demonstrating virtuoso technique make the words vehicles for expressing music more than shared experience. Human vocalists singing Art Song, in their own way, produce their own unsettling Uncanny Valley.
Which may bring up the question, why not just use a real singer? Yes, that would be better. I, who am socially awkward, not able to schedule a time to do my creative work, and heading-up a non-revenue Project can say that would be an ideal, but unlikely, option. Furthermore, in the process of composition I wouldn’t be able to test my musical choices as a limited singer, so there’d likely never be a score for such a singer to follow.***
Will I use a vocal VI again here? Likely, though I don’t think I’ll use it most of the time, or even often. My voice is my voice, and I feel I should use it. Still, I was very happy that I could realize this musical piece. Through the technology of VIs I was also able to play the atomic recombinations of an oboe, a viola da gamba, and a hurdy-gurdy as part of the accompaniment.
OK, so back to Claude McKay’s poem. Like his “When I Have Passed Away” from earlier this month, McKay’s poem here speaks of posthumous poetic legacy. In the context of this month while using a computer VI to sing his words, I was much taken with the pair of lines in his poem: “The modern kings will throttle you to greet/The piping voice of artificial birds.” Maybe 100-years-ago, a prophetic McKay knew how I’d come to try to make a song of his poem using a voice of artifice under the rule of a disordered king and assorted technological barons.
You’ve already heard that song haven’t you? What, you didn’t obey the words and stop partway for the music? You’re a rebel! An outlaw! A traitor! You have one – no, two – more chances to hear my musical setting of “To a Poet:” with the audio player you should see below, or with this highlighted link that will open a new tab with its own audio player.
*Besides mundane life-chores, these increasing problems are partly from aging, and partly secondary to the folks I share my home and life with. It’s hard for me to devote regular and predictable time to this Project, and when opportunity time comes, my nature is to work on finding new words and creating the musical pieces. For some reason (aging? self-doubt?) it’s increasingly hard for me to make the social small-talk that should be trivial and expected.
**I doubt this variation of expression is heavy duty AI either. For a long time VIs have used a pseudo-random cycle of expression variations as an option in their programs. I didn’t get a sense the VI generally knew from the denotative sense of a word or placement in a sentence or musical phrase to give it a particular kind of invocation.
***A product like this, it seems to me, would be ideal for a composer who doesn’t sing well and who would like to rough out scores before an actual performance, as it might give a better quick approximation than just playing the vocal line’s notes on a piano for instance, just as orchestral composers are increasingly roughing out arrangements on other virtual instruments.
I’m starting on one of my New Year’s Resolutions early: to spend more time presenting fresh translations here. I expect a sizeable portion of them will be from French. Today’s piece, from the poet Paul Éluard, will be one example. Since there will be others, I’m going to start today with an aside about the translator’s tasks and my tactics and credentials for doing them, before we get to today’s combination of poetry and music.
I am not a native French speaker, nor do I have great facility with that language. Growing up in a little Iowa town, I had the luck to be able to take French at our small community high school, and later attempted to study it in college. French was Hobson’s choice for any foreign language classes at my small high school, but I welcomed that particular chance. In at least one previous post I’ve mentioned some of my accidental connections to the French language, but let me summarize them for newcomers. I first encountered French during my father and his brother Bill’s fishing trips to Ontario Canada, where I, a grade-school aged kid, was amazed to find the labels on many boxes and cans were bilingual, French and English. Around the same time my beloved Auntie Red, found herself and her young family stationed in France when her military husband was restationed there. Back stateside, she would amaze me by reeling off French phrases still retaining elements of her Southern US accent. That there was such a thing, an entire other language to describe the world, presumably as rich as English, seemed marvelous.
My academic career with French was none-the-less fraught – both in high school and college. Much of the work was based on getting conversational mastery, and I was terrible at it. I have something (I’ve always suspected neurological) that frustrates me with vocal mimesis. It’s likely part of the reason I struggle with singing. Helpful correction of the “no, it’s pronounced like this” kind only made me seem stupid or uncooperative, because my second and further attempts would still be way off in trying to make the right mouth sounds. Though my academic career was eventually stunted anyway, I sometimes wonder what might have happened if I had lucked into a class based on silently reading and appreciating literature in another language.
But that wasn’t on offer, or affordable, to me. So, in my 20s, largely out of school, I started to translate French poetry. This was a laborious process. I would page through a French to English dictionary for all but the most common words. I still retained a smattering of knowledge of French syntactical and grammar practices back then, and putting the two together I was able to produce a handful of translations. One that survived from this work was my translation of Paul Éluard’s “L’Amoureuse” which was presented here some years back.
My activity then, and my activity now, might occasion questions, ones I don’t know that I have a good answer for. Should I be doing this? Wouldn’t it be better if someone fluent in both English and French did any such literary translation? Isn’t the answer the that last question obvious?
My answers (then and now) would be: some of these poems don’t seem to have English translations I have access too, and even if translations exist, isn’t an attempt to do my own translation just another variant of doing one’s own “deep reading” of a poem? If for example, Helen Vendler has written an essay on what she found in a poem, does that mean I shouldn’t look at the poem myself and ask what all is in there – not because I think of myself as more learned or insightful than Vendler, but more at because I’m another human consciousness engaging with the consciousness of the poet.
What gave me such audacity, with so small a mastery of French, to do this? Well, I wanted to – enough for a stubborn young man. Now as an older man, still translating without mastery in the source language, I also tell myself that I did (and do) self-consider myself a poet, a chooser of words, focuser of images, composer of word-music. Part of the task of translation is to do the primary work of literal translation, but to produce the full pleasure to the reader of poetry, the poetic work is at least as important. Decades ago, I read that Ezra Pound used only someone else’s English glosses of Li Bai to create his landmark Cathay collection. Eventually I became aware that Pound’s Chinese translations were not very accurate depictions of Li Bai – and since learning that as a young man I’ve sometimes “checked” translations of poems to see how varied the translator’s version may be from some literal word for word, or from other translators’ versions. I was too uncertain of my own translations to think I was doing better work, but what I read as taking liberties bothered the younger me. Are translators like Pound “cheating” by not serving the original poet faithfully? These resulting English poems (I would say of Pound’s Li Bai) were as much or more the translator’s poem as the source author’s.
But what if I publish my translations? There are what I call “guild concerns” there. In the same way that I worry that my naïve musical compositions and make-do musical skills are, in their small way, part of a flood in the musical culture that reduces the shrinking opportunities for “real musicians” and trained composers, am I doing the same for translators with better knowledge and cultural grounding? Back to Pound: his work out-shadowed other translators who knew Chinese, and I’ve featured here a contemporary of Pound, Shigeyoshi Obata, whose Li Bai translations are largely unknown.
As a guild concern for people who depend, or wish to depend, on income from their art, this can be considered an existential issue, and I wish them no harm. Yet they may think: no matter, you are harming us. And now there’s another monster in the forest that they might view me as riding in on: computer-based artificial intelligence.
Since my early thumb-worn French-English dictionary forays, computer translations have become quite facile. An instant’s click will produce a literal gloss on one’s screen of a poem such as today’s selection. Let me stipulate to all, and to those that fear and dislike AI, these instant computer glosses are not good poetry.* I will click for them, but I will still spend time with dictionaries. What are the various contexts of a word? Which choice in English brings the most to the poem?**
Herein lies one problem. I’m trying to read the source author’s mind, and that will bring in my own mind, experiences, and knowledge to filter that process. This part of translation is unavoidable for causing both errors and accuracy! As I’ve grown older, I now often understand those “cheaters” as other blind ones assessing the elephant of the poem. If, as Frost had it, poetry is what is lost in translation, then a translator’s job is to reclothe the poem’s bones in English poetry, using modern English poetic expression. Doing this has limits, dangers: readers may like their foreign poetry to sound, well, foreign, with an exotic awkwardness – and having ancient poets sound like your contemporaries at a local poetry reading risks unintentional humor.
So, here we go: an early poem by French Surrealist Paul Éluard, “La Vie.” I start with a machine translation.
The 1926 poem in its original French, and a computer translation
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The syntax comes out somewhat scrambled or hard to follow. As a prime Surrealist, one that knew and went through the Dada predecessors to Surrealism, this is likely there in Éluard’s original French I think. My first questions are what are the images: what does the author want me to see, or otherwise sensually appreciate? This can be hard with Surrealist poetry or the like: they often seek strangeness or even nonsense in images. All good imagery works with some degree of mystery or novelty, anything less risks cliché. Even one of those images that you read and think “I’ve never seen it like that before, but once I’ve read this, I’ll always think of this comparison” has to surprise you, cause you to take the leap of likeness. Surrealism says you need to outright react that’s impossible or outrageous to fully free and implement the imagination. So, my primary task is difficult with Surrealist poetry – they may want to be impossible or impenetrable, yet I still try to make the images clear, and this may be subject to mistakes. It’s also possible that in psychoanalyzing the poem that I may be putting things in there that the conscious intent of the original poet didn’t intend. ***
Examining the gloss, I think Éluard is describing a woman whose consciousness is either in a dream state mimicking waking life or living her waking day informed by, or as if, in a dream state. I think the image wants that ambiguity, to have it both ways. Either way, the people and things she meets are like strangers who have been hiding and she has found them for the first time.
My translation, used in today’s short musical performance
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I take the liberty while translating this image in giving double meanings to some words, using more than one English word to stand for a single French word. I’m doing what “rescaling” a lower resolution digital image does, I intersperse additional pixels/words to bring the image out. “Neu” is rendered “naked” and “new;” “fraiche” becomes both “cool” and “fresh.” This is a judgement call, and my choice may be wrong. In making those word choices, using a French dictionary with multiple meanings and usage examples of the word used in context remains useful. Another thought, that AI will miss, but bears considering: the author may have intended a pun or other wordplay .
The final two lines gave me a word-music chance to put a rhyme in to tie things up, what with “gaze” and “sways.” I was so pleased how that worked out that I overlooked one word, a mere possessive pronoun, “ses.” I’m enough of an idiot regarding French usage that I can’t be sure if it’s a male pronoun such as “his” or a general pronoun, a “he/her/it” equivalent. Who’s gaze is it? The woman in the poem? The poet, the male Éluard? Something else, life or imagination?
In my ignorance, and as an admitted failure of craft, I just put down “her,” because at the time I finalized my translation my focus had moved from the word-for-word elements to what is the vivid image; and I thought, this woman that Éluard is admiring in the poem, living the Surrealist outlook, is confident in her own gaze as she sways in either the intoxication of fresh experience or the artistic refinement of dancing her day forward, and so I wrote in my translation “her.” I thought the poem is about the woman – even should be about the woman in the conclusion if I was writing it – but Éluard might have chosen to end it with his gaze evaluating the woman’s experience: I’m the artist, they’re just “life.”
So unintentionally a feminist recasting of the poem? Surrealism does have a problem there: open to women as muses, yet not as open as it should have been in allowing them to be concrete artists themselves. Shades of Éluard and Breton, may I call my ignorant choice a “Freudian slip?”
Today’s music? This was a little exercise on my part using a depiction of a couple of chord progressions from a Joe Pass performance as the basis for the music. Pass was a great Jazz guitarist – but for external practicalities, once more there’s no guitar in this version at all! Dada composition! You can hear my musical performance of Paul Éluard’s “The Life” with the audio player gadget below. No player visible? Not a mistake or slip, it’s just that some ways of reading this blog won’t translate into showing the player. If so, here’s a highlighted link that will open a new tab with an audio player.
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*They don’t generate good literary prose either – producing as they do some estimate of the most probable word to be used, not the one chosen by another human’s consciousness that may not be the most common one-for-one. Moreover, with poetry the word-music issue is ignored by the AI translations, and poetry is musical speech. I generally don’t do rhyming accentual-syllabic translations, the cause of many an “inaccurate” translation, but I want the resulting translated poem to sound like poetry in modern English.
**These choices are a reason I highly recommend translation as training for poets. I don’t believe I undervalue topic, message, or prose-level-meaning in poetry, but many poets are stuck in finding the best combination of what they want to say with how it’s said. While I acknowledge the real issues with AI, for a monolingual, working with a literal/prose gloss of another poet lets one develop those selection-skills of the right word, right order, right connection, while one-step-away from their own experience and desired message.
***This may be proper since Andre Breton, another founding Surrealist, thought Sigmund Freud was on to something crucial with his recent theories and psychoanalysis. That Breton may be wrong about Freud or that Freud may be wrong about how the layers of consciousness and personality work only reinforces my stipulation that this outside consideration of the poet’s fellow consciousness is necessary for accuracy and errors.
Here’s the final piece of this two-parter, and the place where I take off that hair shirt for a while and present a review of John Darnielle’s new book This Year, 365 Songs Annotated.
I largely owe my appreciation of singer-songwriter John Darnielle to my daughter, who found solace in his earlier recordings as she moved through adolescence. One 2005 song, the one that gives its title to a new book by Darnielle, features a 17-year-old speaker refraining: “I am gonna make it through this year if it kills me.” It resonated more than a decade later with another 17-year-old. What a good thing for a song to do.
I knew Darnielle’s work from a couple of songs recorded under his long-running project name “The Mountain Goats,” most notably the mysterious anthem “Jaipur.” My daughter gifted me his All Hail West Texas album one Bandcamp Friday a year or so ago. My immediate thoughts on Darnielle were that he was a good song lyricist. Like the late poet-associate of mine Kevin Fitzpatrick, his work is full of “other people,” and those people are often working class or lost-soul types who make themselves known as if in overheard declarations in his songs. Writing in Boomer classic-rock consumer-guide style “he’s like…” comparisons are misleading in Darnielle’s case. Saying he’s lyrically a mix of Randy Newman, Bruce Springsteen, Ray Davies, and John Prine is a bad assay, because he’s like all of them at once or in sequence, and he is his own man too. Still, the range of characters is an important strength. A lot of poetry, and a lot of indie songwriting too, is a singular solipsistic narrative, and Darnielle’s of the songwriting school that avoids this.
More than a collection of song lyrics (though they’re good lyrics)
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Yet, This Year is largely the story inside one person, a memoir in a different form: a book of days where he writes somewhat sequentially, but not by strict intent or always, about how 365 songs came about, what he thinks he was trying to express, and what his life was like as he wrote and recorded them. The entries can be quite short, a couple of hundred words typically, though a few extend for a few pages. The lyrics to each day’s song are included with each entry, which is helpful for any reader who’s not familiar with his work. I’m half-way through reading it straight through, but the book can also be read an entry at a time, as sort of daily thought-starter. I’m somewhere between a hardcore fan and someone that doesn’t know any of Darnielle’s work, and I’ve sought out some of the songs after reading of them in the book.
Things I’ve learned? It was not apparent to me beforehand, but he’s a poet who converted to songwriting, and many of his early songs had preexisted as page poems that he wasn’t planning to sing. Reading his lyrics silent on the page in this book demonstrates a literary poet’s craft in his writing, but my finding this out in memoir is a testimony to their lack of crusty poetese. Poets as well as songwriters would benefit from exposing themselves to Darnielle’s lyrical tactics, and he talks effectively about them in this book. I also learned that he spent formative years in his songwriting’s development living in a small town in Iowa, the kind of place I grew up in, in roughly the same part of the state, though I’m more than a generation older than him.
Another part of his story, which unreels through the day entries each devoted to a single song from his now large catalog of original songs, is that he began recording and making these songs public using meager equipment. He so far mentions almost nothing about the particulars of his instruments which are likely unremarkable and inexpensive, and a considerable part of his early career recordings – including the original versions of some of his best-loved songs – were recorded on a boom-box cassette tape machine at home. I resonated with that, having spent around 20 years using such cassette tape along with low-budget equipment. A late 20th century indie-music and fanzine samizdat network allowed Darnielle a slow-burn career doing that, around the time that my own nerve to share my work had faded. He recounts in the book, that royalties from the tapes sometimes paid part of the $170 a month rent,* but he had a day job in a lower-paid nursing field, again something I rhymed with in my cassette years.
The short entries in the book also tell a story of Darnielle’s religious journey, which began as a Catholic youth and has had elements of return, though I’m midjourney on that arc so far in the book.
These similarities paradoxically bring up the personal gap which makes reading his book so meaningful to me now. From what I’ve read so far, Darnielle apparently retained confidence in his own work through these long-beginnings, low-rent, lo-fi years, and even if there are dark nights of the soul in coming parts of his book, he displays that now as he discusses the work in retrospect. I had, and still have, substantial gaps in being able to carry that in public during my cassette years. Having days of private levels of self-confidence in some of my musical work is not an effective dose to properly present it to others, and my doing so “blind” without that confidence led me to some painful comedy of misreadings of likely interest. Those two things (managing self-doubt, being able to present one’s work effectively to others) interact. Darnielle may have been more personally engaging, or just more persistent in his networking. Elements of luck might have been significant (with me, they were in my “day job.”) Thinking of this difference as I read Darnielle’s book, it’s (too) easy for me to think, “Well, it must have been easier for him, his work was so darn good.” He’s a better vocalist and performer than I am (no-biggie, almost everybody is), and though I’m not sure how far apart we are in “on a good day” guitarist skills, his song lyrics are teaching me new tactics even after decades of my doing this on the page and with guitar.
In the first part of this pair of posts I sincerely worried about my work and hubris when I put it up against the skillset and history of Jazz. Despite those differences in how we’ve used our parable of the talents, I find reading Darnielle’s book heartening so far. You don’t have to be a songwriter, if you are any kind of writer – and likely if you are an artist of any kind – spending time with this book may be helpful.
Here’s an early song of mine, recorded on primitive equipment before the nearing 900 songs of the Parlando Project had started counting off, but consistent with its principles, a setting of John Keats’ “In the Drear Nighted December.” Audio player gadget should be below, but if not, this highlighted link will open a new tab with its own audio player.
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*For any younger folks reading this, the $170 a month rent (for a house!) must seem a dormouse fantasy. For younger musicians, the idea that royalties from indie recordings might contribute in any substantial way to making rent must seem equally fantastic.
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